Celebrating Year 4 writing
This week we have celebrated some astounding pieces of narrative writing based on both The Jungle Book and Taking Flight – a short film about a boy’s imagination.
All of the year group worked hard on their stories, but these children’s work really stood out: Alexis, HB5; Leora, HB6; Kai, HB7; and Cyrus, HB8.
Alexis was praised for her use of paragraphs, noun phrases, handwriting and use of speech. Leora wrote an expressive story which teased the reader and built tension. Kai demonstrated a fantastic choice of vocabulary, and Cyrus’ writing was full of description and intensity. They should all be very proud of their efforts; we certainly are!
Below I have included a snippet of what each child wrote. Please enjoy.
Alexis: In a sudden movement, the ground shook and the temple started to collapse! Mowgli ran for his life and King Louie stood up. He started chasing Mowgli dodging pillars and found the nearest exit. Mowgli leapt for a tree. He made it just in time. Everyone made it just in time apart for the monkey king. The temple fell on him. The monkeys dug for their king but one rock got misplaced and they all died.
Leora: Meanwhile, Baloo and Bagheera were clawing their way up to Monkey City. Baloo thought of many promising escape plans but Bagheera always managed to find a flaw in them. Just as they were about to give up hope, Bagheera made a sensible suggestion. “Will it work?” asked Baloo. “It’ll save Mowgli’s life,” answered Bagheera.
Kai: Nono’s announcement informed Tony and his blue teddy bear that this particular jungle they were adventuring into was infested by a rare type of glow-eyed monkey. Their glowing eyes met Tony’s; a monkey screeched a command. The monkeys swung tree to tree gaining ground on the pair. Tony and Nono made a brave decision to hurl themselves off a cliff into a lake inhabited by hungry crocodiles ready to snap their jaws at any moment.
Cyrus: As soon as Mowgli arrived at the gargantuan monkey city, he sat there and stared at the tall, ruined buildings. The dirty monkeys were pushing and scratching him. Mowgli listened to the howling monkeys playing in the darkness of the tunnels. Finally, they arrived at one of the buildings. While Mowgli was being forced to stay, Baloo and Bagheera were on their way to save Mowgli.

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